IELTS ESSAY - Nowadays, students find it hard to study at universities compared to school studies. Why this is happening. What is the solution to this problem?

It is universally acknowledged that a lot of students feel difficult in learning when they move from high schools to universities or colleges. There are several reasons for this phenomenon and some measures should be put to reality so as to tackle the problem.

It is obvious that the discrepancies in learning styles and lifestyles may be two main reasons for this issue. First of all, in terms of learning ways, the lack of teachers’ management may lead to the diminish in their learning performances. To illustrate, in Vietnam, students in high schools learn a lot of theories, formulas and do homeworks and their teachers evaluate them via these homeworks and tests, therefore, when they enroll courses in universities, they cannot deal with case studies, presentations without the support of teachers. The second cause is that attending universities, students have the freedom to do whatever they want. Indeed, instead of learning at schools and coming back homes with parents, almost students in universities stay away from their homes, so they have more time to hang out with friends, take part-time jobs or become volunteers, which leads to the lack of concentration on study.

In order to cope with this problem, both the Ministry of Education and individuals should take some steps. Firstly, it is evident that the Ministry of Education should improve teaching method in high school syllabus. If they design new teaching method like providing more teamwork activities, researching real case studies, and so forth, which can foster students’ autonomy, and their students can be able to adopt new learning environment in universities because of this. The second way is that students should set up scientific schedules for themselves. Owing to timetables, students may organize their daily routine logically and clearly, in the long term, they can balance their study as well as other activities, therefore, learners may not only enhance their academic performances but also become well-disciplined citizens.

In conclusion, I believe that because of the difference in learning styles and lifestyles, students fell study at universities is rather hard than high school. That the reasons why both relative bodies and learners should have some actions to counter this issue.

Votes
Average: 7.2 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35635359116 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.965951745 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546961325967 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.6756302941 49.4020404114 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.5 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206638436445 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764193672185 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478694452431 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155552606645 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479181544917 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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