IELTS Writing Task 2 - Education
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Question: Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer:
The tuition fee for higher education is always an issue appealing to people’s attention. It is said that the governments should abolish fees to allow everyone to access university, but it seems to me this suggestion will have more disadvantages than advantages.
There are many compelling reasons why students should be permitted to pursue college without a fee. On the individual level, after graduating from university, people will have sufficient skills, knowledge to get a decent job. It will help them take care of themselves and support their family. On the societal level, a lot of skilled laborers will push the economy, which will result in a thriving economy. Moreover, a society with many educated people will be a civilized one.
Although waiving tuition has some benefits, I would contend that it still has some adverse on both students and society. First, if everyone can easily access to higher education, without fee, they won’t appreciate their study. It will lead to a bad result so this method may cost both government's budget and student’s time. Second, the government has a ton of things to pay for such as medical, traffic, national defense,... so that coverage for all student’s tuition at university can put a strain on government coffers. Consequently, it will make budget deficits, tax hikes, or reduced welfare among others.
Despite some advantages of abolishing tuition, the disadvantages will overshadow them so I strongly believe that government should continue to charge for higher education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 286, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...bad result so this method may cost both governments budget and student’s time. Second, the ...
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Line 13, column 421, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...ch as medical, traffic, national defense,... so that coverage for all student’s tu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, still, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.300330033 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83117922693 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607260726073 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3542272612 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2222222222 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.050915700135 0.244688304435 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0172624625087 0.084324248473 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331952283809 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0316924851259 0.151304729494 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02493003594 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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