IELTS Writing Task 2 Education

Education has great significance and value in man’s world. Man’s life seems to be incomplete without it. It is acknowledged that Education has become an integral part of today’s man. Our condition in life becomes easy and comfortable. It sustains life as bread does. It Education that gives us strength, energy, and determination. It creates an incentive to work. Therefore, it is inevitable in the life of an individual and in society. It is said: A Contented mind is the blessing a man can enjoy in this world. (Joseph Addison)
Life without Education is like a ship without a rudder. Just as it is impossible for a ship to sail over the sea without a rudder. In the same way, it becomes difficult for a man to get through the passage of life heroically without Education. It is Education that helps a man to put the flag of triumph high. Man can raise the standard of living and can attain peace and prosperity. Life is sure to become a hopeless wreck if it is without education. Benjamin says. As a general rule, the most successful man in life is the man who has the best information.
Education can become the crown and glory of human life. The whole universe can be ruled and governed by Education. We can acquire this gift of God Almighty by dint of devotion, purity of thought,t and sincerity of heart. All human beings whether it is rich or poor, upper or lower. Black or white needs to adopt Education. So it is the destination of all mankind the part that Education in life can never be fully estimated or enjoyed. Education is therefore one of the greatest gifts that God has bestowed upon us. Education is a secret and mystery of happy and successful life. The past history of man society, religiously or culturally reveals that it has provided great success to man. When Education is a basic principle of their lives no human being, however great, or powerful, was ever so free as a fish. (John Ruskin)Human life is a combination of opposites. Every picture of life gives different. Shades of colors. When we concentrate on one side of the picture. The other side may be ignored or hidden. Necessary in human life and Education maintains the balance in human’s life. It gives us great benefits. Life, whether it is of individual or collective, is a chain of trials. Sorrows and adversities are part of life. Very often man is disheartened. It is education that comes to his rescue and inspires him. Education teaches patience and endurance. Education helps us in the acquisition of wealth, rank, and reputation. It matures our understanding and wisdom. It matures us better, happier, and more useful.
We may conclude, Education is significant for the success and glory of life. Both individuals and the nation rely upon it. The importance of Education is now self-evident. We can follow the principle of Education. Indeed Education is the discipline for the avenue of life.The secret of success in life is for a man to be ready for his opportunity when it comes. (Disraeli, British Politician)

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'acknowledged'.
Suggestion: acknowledged
...eems to be incomplete without it. It is acknowledge that Education has become the integral ...
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Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... us strength, energy and determination. It creates an incentive to work. Theref...
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Line 17, column 102, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...life gives different. Shades of colors. When we concentrate on one side of picture. ...
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Line 24, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... us better, happier and more useful. We may conclude, Education is significan...
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Line 26, column 210, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
... can follow the principle of Education. Indeed Education is the discipline for the ave...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 13.1623246493 236% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 10.4138276553 269% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 8.3376753507 420% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2529.0 1615.20841683 157% => OK
No of words: 524.0 315.596192385 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82633587786 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81655274729 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459923664122 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 506.74238477 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 49.0 16.0721442886 305% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 10.0 20.2975951904 49% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.2717511159 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 51.612244898 106.682146367 48% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.693877551 20.7667163134 51% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 0.979591836735 7.06120827912 14% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.38176352705 297% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 8.67935871743 288% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 19.0 3.4128256513 557% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11625104314 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339349333436 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504258814334 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0484246237766 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454066782125 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 13.0946893788 51% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.33 50.2224549098 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.55 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.1190380762 59% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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