Imagine scientists have invented a new medicine If you drink it you will be able to speak every language in the world There is just one problem You will never be able to speak your own language again Would you drink the medicine Write about your decision

Essay topics:

Imagine scientists have invented a new medicine. If you drink it, you will be able to speak every language in the world. There is just one problem. You will never be able to speak your own language again.
Would you drink the medicine? Write about your decision.

As a lover of languages and the craft of language learning, I have always dreamt of conquering all languages. Yet, were I to be offered a potion that will make me proficient in all the world's languages, yet will strip me of the ability to utter a word in my mother tongue ever again, I will politely and defiantly refuse. With the following composition, I am going to discuss two reasons for my stance.

Firstly, being proficient at all languages of the world just by taking a medicine will take away my appreciation for languages and language learning. Never again will I appreciate the differences and the challenges new foreign languages pose to me. Whether it be the case system of Russian or German, conjugations of French or Italian, or the hieroglyphs of Egyptian and Chinese, the euphoria of conquering these seemingly insurmountable challenges will never come to me again.

Simultaneously, losing the right to speak my native tongue is depriving me from a very core part of my identity. Being Vietnamese, and a speaker of the sweet musical language embedded with my nation, fills me with joy and pride. Not being able to communicate with the people who share my own land will be saddening to me, as there will now be a wall between me and the people whom I have so much love to give. Moreover, I can no longer appreciate the musicality and the velvety texture of the songs, poems and other literary works in my language. As such, I will lose a crucial and defining part of my sense of identity.

In conclusion, I will not drink any medicine that gives me the ability to speak all languages of the world, bar my mother tongue, for such a potion will come at the price of me losing my joy in language learning, and my sense of national and cultural identity.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...on for languages and language learning. Never again will I appreciate the differences...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63492063492 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79102690631 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51746031746 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2272249229 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.666666667 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222846492016 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929754665 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636324293892 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157502664688 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373179460864 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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