With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people.
Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
With the improvement of technology, many facets of daily life such as education, entertainment, health care system,.. has been ameliorated. That's is the reason why health of the seniors are becoming the renowned issue which force the society to look after them. I personally believe that society may have a possibility to tackle with the increasing numbers of elderly people in this aging era and the effective method will be scrutinized below.
To be clear, diseases and illnesses can easily to handle with the supporting of cutting-edge medical machine when compared to the past. This is a vital factor prove that the hospital nowadays help the victim recover as soon as possible. Moreover, the government and authority system allocate a truckload of money such as insurance, standard living' development,... and organize many programs which call for many volunteers to trigger this social phenomenon. Furthermore, the advent of private hospital and sanitorium spread like a mushroom in this aging society, which can expand the capacity of elder patient. Taking for an instance, the current record in Singapore reported that they have seen a decline in the number of the old thanks to the development of medical technology.
However, the way to manage it positive trend is cost us a fortune. The money to run and maintain the bleeding-edge medical equipment cost the governments an arm and a leg on the yearly basis. To cope with this problem, we need a sponsor and patron from cash cow and each individual in order to share the obligations with the government. To be precise, not only money can support us to operate this positive results but also the voluntary from the youngsters and society. With the large volume of volunteer, we can assure that all the elderly patient can be provided the better sense of caring from health system. The old no longer feel sedentary and enjoy the empathy when they are in predicament. Finally, the government and authority system can impose the subsidies to the medical aspect for the youngster in order to create a chance to hire more doctors and nurses to face with it thorny problems .
In conclusion, I wholeheartedly opine that community will have enough power to relieve the increasing volume in older people. Although this is really hassle to manage this trend, we can apply some offered solution above to mitigate this number.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 394.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04568527919 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78467663662 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573604060914 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0572996796 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.631578947 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276107053184 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681835690953 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664190208332 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158057762589 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843128106177 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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