With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people.
Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The world's natal rate is getting lower which in turn means that our society is getting older, existing more and more elderly people in need of attention and health care.
In fact, the most recent technical innovations are a big asset in these cases given that there is various medical equipment that supports nurses and professional healthcare workers in their day-to-day life during their work shifts. However, these machines need people to operate them and because of poor work conditions, with people having to work double shifts and still earning low salaries, the amount of people's interest in working in these areas is diminishing. This situation is seen in multiple hospitals and continued care facilities where, since the amount of work surpasses the facility's capacity, a lot of professionals are overworked and are mentally drained which results in them being on leave due to their health. Besides that, this situation was aggravated when COVID-19 hit. The hospitals were crowded and the medical teams were understaffed due to already not being enough professionals to deal with the pandemic and to the aggravated phenomenon of overworking the ones that were in service.
Nevertheless, the current situation can be reversed with the aid of the government. There are several careers, like working in air traffic control and politics, that earn more and have additional resources when compared to the health system and their workers. One way of acting could be by investing more in health and retrieving a part of the investments in other areas that don't need as much funding. These investments could be directed toward raising the worker's salaries and hiring more personnel. This way they would feel valued and motivated to keep working. Besides a bigger staff would make it possible for each worker to have more days off and, thus, be able to recharge and not feel so tired. In addition by observing these changes and how healthcare workers are appreciated, there would be a higher percentage of young adults interested in taking care of others and studying to do so. To illustrate this, the government of the Azores after meeting with the regional nurses union and taking into account their difficulties opened up more spots in the various hospitals and clinics throughout the archipelago. This resulted in the fill of job positions by recent nursing graduates and an increase in personnel. This way, not only a new generation of professionals was gaining experience in treating others, given that in the future could pass down this knowledge, but also the workload of the already existing healthcare professionals was decreased resulting in a better work environment and mood.
In conclusion, society is facing a crisis in the health system which could compromise the well-being of the elderly if no action is taken to motivate and reward healthcare workers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 41.998997996 174% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2406.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 468.0 315.596192385 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14102564103 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75196421395 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 176.041082164 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540598290598 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.6676694944 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.529411765 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5294117647 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244498410056 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746701920636 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576549396723 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156839756914 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490388706544 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 9.78957915832 179% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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