With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?
In the words of one of the most prominent scientists of the USA Dr. Shaefer, due to the fact that fossil fuel consumption is rising globally, unexplored areas should be discovered to obtain more resources. However, it seems to me that unused areas should certainly not be explored to access more funds for industries destroy the environment in order to gain more resources and alternative renewable resources can certainly replace oil and gas.
In the first place, I'm against the introduction of new industries in undiscovered lands because they may destroy local ecosystem. In other words, to protect the environment we should not explore unused areas, but invest in science and technology to increase the efficiency of constructed industries. For example, the government of Kazakhstan built an oil platform in the western region. As a consequence, noxious materials spilled into the water during the process caused disruption to sea life and death of various sea creatures. For this reason, it's obvious that contaminants and toxic wastes from factories can lead to the extinction of animals. Therefore, I am convinced that the construction of new manufacturings in unexplored areas may lead to environmental disaster.
In the second place, you also have to understand that fossil fuels have limited reserves and therefore should be replaced by alternatives like green power technologies. To explain, Solar, wind and tidal resources could replace our demand for oil and gas, and they could also reduce levels of environmental pollution produced by the overuse of fossil fuel. For instance, in Germany, to reduce the need for oil almost all cars run on green power. Such technologies maintain better environmental conditions and will reduce manufacturing costs. All in all, I am opposed to the construction of new industries to access more resources with limited reserve because there are some more low-priced alternatives with better environmental conditions, like renewable resources.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in other words, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39871382637 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0868803584 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581993569132 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9762652334 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.153846154 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204702253103 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596999383811 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547132783265 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138396816212 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063057969314 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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