While some folks insist that soaring fares of gasolines is the most outstanding approach to tackle expanding transportation systems and impairment issues, i completely disagree with this idea. Indeed, there are several paths which sound utterly convincing. This essay will discuss firstly on why rising the price of petrol is powerless in cutting air pollutions, and secondly, the two crucial steps that need to be executed by the government with relevant examples.
On the one hand, generally speaking, primarily, more than two-thirds of vehicles which are routinely run on expressways constitute cars that are typically driven by affluent people. So surging the bill of fuels would not normally affect the wealthy drivers, instead the gas companies would generate substantial profits and could affect impoverished operators, who unfortunately represent very minute proportions, subjecting to a worthless scheme. On the second place, since public transportations are oftentimes unpunctual, grossly overcrowded and perilous, many people are just fine to avoid such systems. Therefore, with the consideration of time saving, safety and convenience, the majority of autoists are bound to run automobiles in spite of the soared costs of fuel.
On the other hand, firstly, the government ought to enact criminal laws. Certainly, motorists would be necessitated to stick to rules and regulations, for violating orders could throw them to overcrowded prisons provided that the authority enforced case legislations against the drivers who would run second hand vehicles, which generally emit noxious gases as opposed to contemporary automobiles. Secondly, the ministry should provide tax incentives for the citizens who would chose trains, buses, bicycles and so on over cars, which are the paramount determinants of the green house gases that are strictly liable for the contamination of pristine atmospheres. Not only would public transit services become purely instrumental in lightening crippling burdens of fragile environments but also every individual would feel fit as a fiddle as cycling and walking on foot burn calories significantly.
In conclusion, presumably, owing to the dense population of well-off automobilists, perilous and tardy mass transit systems, the strategy of inflating the expense of petrol to combat congested traffic and limit spoliation is apparently fruitless.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. instead of 'transportation systems and impairment issues', use:
'transportation systems and pollution issues' to match the topic.
2. instead of 'On the other hand, ', use:
'There are other measures which might be more effective.' to match the topic.
3.This is over used:
On the one hand, generally speaking, primarily,
one is enough.
4. better not to use 'which' or 'that' too often in one sentence, use one only or remove them as much as possible, like:
more than two-thirds of vehicles which are routinely run on expressways constitute cars that are typically driven by affluent people.
advised:
more than two-thirds of vehicles routinely run on expressways constitute cars are typically driven by affluent people.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1988 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.6 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.968 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.547 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, well, while, in conclusion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76056338028 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07111246933 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.676056338028 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.7804551054 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.416666667 106.682146367 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5833333333 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.75 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0394405803642 0.244688304435 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0138248392209 0.084324248473 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0191653839695 0.0667982634062 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0263922774354 0.151304729494 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019786767503 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 50.2224549098 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.72 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.35 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 78.4519038076 180% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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