Individuals and countries cannot help everyone who needs help in the world, so they should only be concerned about their own countries and communities. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that we are living in a global village. Every country of the world is connected to each other and every individual has a role to play in the society. Some masses ponder that one can not help everyone in the society who is in need. However, I disagree that, people should only shoe the concern to the inhabitants of their own nation and community.
There are several reasons I put forward to prove my inclination. The most obvious argue is that, every nation today is interdependent on each other. Though, some nations are wealthier than others or require their basic needs for food, clothing and shelter to be fulfilled. According to me, countries that are well to do can help poorer countries to overcome their poverty. For instance, some developing nations that had faced natural calamity require financial help to raise economy. This is possible only, when another country is willing to do so. This not only provides support to affected country but also help to develop international relationship as well as enhance international trade. In addition, in many developing country like India face problems of unemployment. Other develop nation can resolve this issue by providing job opportunity to the immigrants.
Furthermore, it is obviously necessary that, economy abundant countries should contribute more to help other poor countries in various aspects. This is because most poor nation can not afford to help themselves as they do not have enough resources and technology to help their citizens. Thus, those rich countries are required to share the advanced technology and support financially to make poor countries more livable place.
In conclusion, it seems to me that, to help those people who live in under developing countries and even, they do not fulfill their basic amenities, by providing job opportunity in developed nations and give financial support as well as advances technology to poor nations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 267, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...who is in need. However, I disagree that , people should only shoe the concern to ...
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Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
... own nation and community. There are several reason I put forward to prove my inclination. ...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
..., clothing and shelter to be fulfilled. According to me, countries that are well to do can help...
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Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hose people who live in under developing countries and even, they do not fulfill ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, so, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14603174603 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79258659623 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546031746032 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6265639325 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3529411765 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354534244752 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109335406716 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784970577859 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227285903641 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541638073758 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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