International entertainers, including sports personalities, often get paid millions of dollars in one year.
In your view, with widespread poverty in the world, are these huge earnings justified?
There is a controversial issue wherein people are talking about how many salaries the celebrity such as actors, singers and sports people earn is reasonable. Some think that it is unfair because everyone try to do the best in their jobs but someone only just maintains their basic life even they work longer than others. Others believe that it is Inappropriate if people can decide how many wages they can get. I agree with the former opinion and this essay is going to explain my reason for it.
Although celebrities can certainly have value to our society and they can bring us many laughs, but there are more jobs could lead people to a better life and help us far from some common diseases. For example, scientists are dedicated to inventing new medicine or medical equipment to make sure patients can have the best treatment in the future. Moreover, every job should be respected and get an equal paid after their hard work. In some developing counties, many labours such as construction workers, cleaner and Packer are not taking seriously because people discriminate that kind of work which is unacceptable.
On the contrast, some people doubt that once the salaries can be controlled by the government or any organization then we might have a risk of lose our freedom because they cannot just limit entertainers not everyone. Perhaps it is the best solutions to solve poverty in our world. If they realize their wage are not too many difference with others who did not work hard. As a result, it possibly makes some people are lazier than before. In addition, some celebrities are willing to help others by using their money to set up a foundation to help disabled people or give food to the poor country.
In conclusion, despite famous people can benefit our society but it is not obligatory that they should do. Therefore, in my opinion, if the government make some law to take more tax from the people who get a lot of salaries and use these to help other citizens. It will be a nice way to fix poverty problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun difference seems to be countable; consider using: 'many differences'.
Suggestion: many differences
... If they realize their wage are not too many difference with others who did not work hard. As a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, talking about, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7323943662 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54621087958 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566197183099 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1782653453 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0551413800109 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0237140915375 0.084324248473 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270795102643 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0392536988615 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0122031049574 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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