While i agree that the online network grants us to remain united with each other irrespective of the whereabouts, i also acknowledge that the internet emboldens public to isolate. This essay will discuss firstly the compatible reasons on how the cyber space bounds citizens to dissociate with the surroundings, and secondly, the relevant logics behind staying linked with one another with relevant examples.
On the one hand, infinite roots of mind blowing games, movies and so on are the paramount determinants of excluding the individual from peers, families and neighbourhoods. As vast wonderful computer games and films can certainly lighten sombre moods and alleviate mounting anxieties, evidently, people are utterly absorbed to spend online for several hours. Not only would countless options cause a person obsessive but also the choices could erect a partition preventing the citizen from the real world. Next, the internet forms a solid basis for human beings to escape the existing universe. Because people who are desperately alarmed to face a genuine life, to develop direct social relationships, the net can be administered as a sound coverup, which usually aids them to soak into the virtual planet, to evade from communities.
On the other hand, primarily, it ought to be highlighted that the blessings of the internet have entirely broken the physical barriers of cosmos, which means that people can have effective communication with their families and loved ones from all over the globe. Furthermore, despite being in one corner of the world, video chatting, which unquestionably makes whole planets much smaller, can indeed simulate real face to face conversations that generally promote genuine intimacies. On the second place, unlike in previous times, when the intercommunication was terribly inconvenient and considerably sluggish since the dissemination would normally take months, conversely, this type of technology has made perfectly possible for public to transmit messages instantaneously and efficiently. Therefore, it ascertains why the technology is remarkably productive.
In conclusion, in spite of telescopic locations, presumably, the net remains particularly potent in coalescing every personal. Even though it is liable for insulating the dependent people from the actual nature, i believe that the problem can be solved willingly if parents and teachers are intensely conscious about their children and students from the beginning.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the last sentence goes away:
Even though it is liable for insulating the dependent people from the actual nature, i believe that the problem can be solved willingly if parents and teachers are intensely conscious about their children and students from the beginning.
the topic is about 'us'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 374 350
No. of Characters: 2052 1500
No. of Different Words: 248 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.398 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.487 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.944 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.085 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
While i agree that the online network grants us...
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Line 7, column 213, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ependent people from the actual nature, i believe that the problem can be solved ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63101604278 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04767798531 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657754010695 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.345072455 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.0 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7692307692 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140522754385 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439495580735 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635638191474 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0832940650914 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702459160899 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 50.2224549098 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.97 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.81 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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