It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child s development are media pop culture and friends A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role Discuss both views and give your opinion

A children's behaviour depends on the environment they live and friends they have. It is frequently argued that, the western culture and friends play huge role in shaping their nature. While, others contradict to this and suggest parents make huge portion in their offsprings nature. This essay delves on these both views and states my reasons on which side I prefer.
Teenager's actions highly depend on what they see and learn. They often look up their peers and learn in various conditions. As, most of the time kids stay in home and live with their parents. They tend to learn from them and also copy there actions and act live them. If the father or mother is doctor they child follows them and thinks of becoming doctor. With helps in a good manner. In contradiction, there are many negative impacts also. If a father drinks and smokes, in front of the them, they think it is cool and follows. This is quite dangerous and eventually damages the future in many ways. Thus, family members can show impact both in optimistic and negative manner.
On the other hand, there is an rapid rise in online activity among youth. Mainly listening to pop music and having social media friends. The pop shows some dark sides like adult drinks and even violence. Furthermore, the virtual friends we make are not trustworthy who can destroy others future. However, these conditions are upto the individual to accept or just take as entertainment. For example, I watch all kinds of music mostly Western and even have hundreds of friends on the internet. On the contrast, I just use these for timepass and I don't take guidance from strangers whom I met online. Therefore, inspite of having impact on life, it's upto the person to take it or just pass it.
To sum up, both the parents and media plays role in developing owns character. However, I think the family plays huge role in shaping there heirs life.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72809667674 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36295497046 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583081570997 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.4785086289 49.4020404114 35% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.2083333333 106.682146367 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7916666667 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146616886322 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372198409466 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503400794326 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102252295493 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614539283222 0.056905535591 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 13.0946893788 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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