It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A child's maturity is affected by a multitude of factors, thus diversifying the variety of opinions about some select being the prime influences. One consensus of which is that such predominant factors are media, pop culture and peers, while others believe family to be paramount. This essay will give delve deeper to both aforementioned views before deriving a coherent conclusion supportive of the latter.
External factors affects a child's future in critical ways due to several reasons. To begin with, as technological progression and living standard escalation have been taking place over the last few decades, children have been endowed with considerably increased accessibility to electronic devices, thus spending comparably more time on the media and contemporary culture than with their family. Considering their imitative nature and plasticity, they form their belief system through exposure to the media, the books they read, the music they listen to and so on. In addition, playing in groups with their peers along with comparably more time at school and playing than time at home for most children, they also receive profound influence from their peers.
Despite aforementioned explanations, external factors pale in comparison to family members in terms of influences on a person's development. Firstly, their malleability is at its peak in their very young age while parents are almost always present at this stage of their life, thus making parents the sole influencers inasmuch as children mimic their closest relatives' actions. Secondly, family bonding and emotional attachment ever since birth is superior and can supersede any other factors, where children can freely express their interests, wishes and needs to their parents who will suitably address. Last but not least, in retrospect, children's choice and experiences of media and pop culture are initially instilled and chosen by their family members, in which growing in a family filled with adequate care would shape a prosperous future, whereas the opposite goes for a dysfunctional family.
After analyzing both views in details, I state my opinion that family hold sway over a child's development. However, the outside world's role is also significant especially considering the time children spend with those factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, whereas, while, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48169014085 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81452857808 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628169014085 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.6546850393 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.692307692 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3076923077 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181154841489 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733773362147 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542133737531 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131718381129 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679389381266 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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