It is the commonly believed that we ought to just focus on our own society’s issues because it is impossible to support all the needy
It is the commonly believed that we ought to just focus on our own society’s issues because it is impossible to support all the needy. While I admit that it could result in numerous positive influences, I would argue that there are several adverse consequences are likely to be generated.
On the one hand, there are various reasons why people should only support the disabilities in their own communities. Firstly, the financial and human resources of each country are limited. Thus, they have better take use of these sources to improve their own citizens’ quality of life. For instance, although USA is one of the most modern nations in the world, they still have various challenges like unemployment, sexual harassment or homelessness that need to be resolved. Besides, the voluntary help is prone to dependence and reliance that can lead to the unbalance. More specially, people who gain tremendous aids tend to lose their motivation to move forward and forget how to overcome the obstacles themselves. Thereby, they depend completely on supporters and lack of control as well as real capacity.
On the other hand, supporting the needy outside the society could also bring about considerable advantages. The primary reason is that giving help to other societies can help expand and bond international relationship for sustain development. By this way, the people not only give assistance but also are received aid when they are in trouble. Furthermore, the larger the community is, the more power it has. Hence, by helping each other, the society would experience the more rapid growth. Another cause is that there might be more serious issues in other nation. For example, as famine in Africa could easily lead to death while illiteracy in Asia only brings about lack of awareness, it is more urgent to mitigate the issue of Africa.
By way of conclusion, I believe that although there are several benefits of the current trend to only pay attention on the communities which people are a part, they are outweighed by the drawbacks.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09171597633 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80539683321 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591715976331 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0364021212 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.235294118 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58823529412 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25046447467 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805103587001 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.203553636195 0.0667982634062 305% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176997690819 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.206520371681 0.056905535591 363% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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