It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries Is it a positive or negative development | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries.

Is it a positive or negative development?

Recently, older generation has more likely to be higher than younger generations in some countries. Personally, I strongly think that this situation results in negative issues; there were two main factors that cause some countries worse when they have to combat the majority of older people’s living in society.

Firstly, it is well-known fact that it might occur economic depression. This is because most investors are younger generation that challenges and likes to take risks in new investments, which could stimulate economy their countries continuously and attract revenue from foreigners or local people. However, older generation is mainly saving money for personal expenses. As they get older without ability to work, it made they tend to think that stability finance is more important than others. So, some countries having older people than younger people will gain lower revenue from investment occurring within their countries. This is a reason why some countries gradually grow in parts of economy.

Another reason is that the country will face increasing in health problem that lead to a lack of medical staff and health center, resulting from having the vast of older people in society. For instance, when the country will try to cope with pandemic outbreak, having older people tend to have higher risks than young because they have more vulnerable bodies and could be infection easily. Therefore, the doctors and medical staffs will hard work to treat people beyond their comprehensive care, when compare to younger people.
All of these reasons tend to be drawbacks due to the effect of controlling the health of people in the country.
In conclusion, I totally believe that having lots of older people in the country leads to lose benefits of economy and difficulty to take care of population in their countries. Consequently, there are negative development.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30666666667 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64117818828 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546666666667 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8582196596 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.714285714 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232330883821 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841165439395 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554310190634 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135071561445 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377787832157 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments