It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
in term of nurturing children, a sanction application is needed to be introduced in an early phase of development to educate them whether something is right or wrong. in my point of view, this kind of method is unacceptable to become an education's instrument as it appears with a negative impact on their psychological side and that is why the appropriate approachment is educational discipline.
first of all, in the early stage of development, the mental condition is fragile. Naturally, in this stage, they tend to absorb and keep violence treatment in their minds vividly which drive to cruelty in their adulthood. Furthermore, their personality would probably be replicated and reflected based on their childhood experience, so it is sensible when many people who have no criminal record unpredictably become wrongdoer due to a negative occasion previously, resulting in bad person. to illustrate this condition, Ryan Jombang, a sex abuser and slaughter, is jeopardy of his hard education which his father used to slap him when he broke a law. this is a vicious cycle that will continue to create new violence over generations.
oh the other hand, educational punishment would be an effective treatment to in their educational process. by employing this measurement character and trait are able to be formed easily without painful; in fact, this process poses a long-lasting effect and is fruitful to deliver the basic principle of life as early as possible. for instance, suspending money is useful to be imposed when they behave extravagantly in gifted money; consequently, they may be able to learn how to respect and manage a wealthy.
to sum up, it is denied for children to obtain capital punishment as this approachment led to an adverse effect mentally in entire life. Thereby, I suggest that the effective way to bring up children life is by means of educational discipline.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, for instance, in fact, kind of, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14239482201 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09540116349 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611650485437 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2797714924 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.416666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159266645078 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593680141551 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417857196737 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10052608234 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287294971687 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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