It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
History is an important subject at school. Some people prompts the ideal that local history plays more important role compare to the world history. In my opinion, I am partially disagree with this.
National history benefits schoolchildren in various ways. The countries’ history tell the kids about its origin, explain how people lived in the past, what people have done in certain historical events. All of the local historic facts contribute to the national culture. Learning the history of the kids’ country not only acknowledges them about the events but also explains to them some of cultural tradditions. For example, the occurance of …. In addition, the pass history will enhance the national pride for the children, which keep the chidren love their country more. From historical events, children learn about the traddition and dignity of their ancestor, and continue keeping as wellas developing them. Vietnamese traddition of tacking foreign enemies has been preserving throught out the period of building and protecting the countries, and nowadays, the young generation are taught and keep the pride of the traddition.
Worldwide history, on the other hand, can not be underestimated. Learning what happened around the world helps us explain some event, as a results, the interaction between countries and inside the nation itself. For instance, the global colonisation happened due to the economical crisis is among the Western countries. Futhermore, studying about the past broaden our mind in understanding other countries past, which strengthen solidarity amongst the nations.
In conclusion, the local history is essential for every children in a country, but can not deny the importance the world history in children’s education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disagreed'.
Suggestion: disagreed
... history. In my opinion, I am partially disagree with this. National history benefits...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...have done in certain historical events. All of the local historic facts contribute to the ...
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Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...e world helps us explain some event, as a results, the interaction between countries and ...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...global colonisation happened due to the economical crisis is among the Western countries. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54612546125 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91942791083 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619926199262 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6098742836 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9375 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9375 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293600944643 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888062796253 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616149974157 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182782718228 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529276487121 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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