It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree？
It is sometimes argued that it would be beneficial to offer an excessive number of youngster tertiary education placement. In my opinion, this trend is advantageous however not feasible as will be discussed.
On the one hand, there are some benefits when universities admit a tremendous percentage of young learners. First, students will have chances to seek rewarding employment because they are able to acquire more knowledge about their major. Which means university enables them to attain an academic qualification which may support them in the future career. For example, in German or Finland, the unemployment rate is low owing to the fact that a high number of young learners are encouraged to attend university. Second, this trend will result in the increase in quality of labor force since more employees are well-educated and equipped with basic skills. For instance, Japan has made efforts to invest in university education related to technology which contributes to a great number of prominent inventors in this country.
On the other hand, there are some reasons why I enunciate the idea that this development is unfeasible/not viable. Initially, due to different levels of students’ competence, it is tough to offer equal chances for all students. It is obvious that students having cognitive impairments or being lazy cannot receive the same university education curriculum. Additionally, the shortage of lecturers and facilities when a massive number of learners going to universities should also be mentioned. To be specific, some nations in Africa such as Southern Sudan is still in war, so they would very much like to solve problem of starvation and insecurity rather than invest in university education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...quire more knowledge about their major. Which means university enables them to attain...
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Line 3, column 674, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion and insecurity rather than invest in university education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, well, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35164835165 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01906619622 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6336996337 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9917570284 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.384615385 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0994654419452 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341912714463 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374246671292 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0570283389279 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450174365232 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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