It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree?
The advent of technological advances in film-making, printing and the internet has provided people with a precious opportunity to immerse themselves deeply in other cultures, which unintentionally motivates them to underestimate the importance of travelling. From my perspective, I am not convinced by this statement and suppose that travelling is the only way to study other cultures.
On the one hand, travelling will facilitate tourists to grasp the indigenous culture. Indeed, what travellers might benefit from travelling is to take in an array of traditions and customs of local people that might not be broadcasted on the television. Take Bangkok as a prime example, foreign tourists could gain a deeper insight into various exhilarating outdoor activities in Songkran day, which is known as Thailand’s new year festival, such as the implied meaning behind watering activities. As a result, their cultural background will be broadened in an authentic way, which, in turn, allows people to share their authentic emotions to others.
On the other hand, learning a different culture from books, movies and the internet will hinder tourists from obtaining an overall picture of other culture. To be more specific, it is plausible that contents that mirror the dark side of a country circulated in the state media, films and books tend to come under the scrutiny of the government. This rigorous checking will aim at bringing foreign tourists with a perfect image of a home country to attract more tourists and therefore accelerate the revenue of the tourism industry. Consequently, tourists are those who not only squander a lot of money but also fail to achieve a genuine understanding of their destinations that they desire to visit.
In conclusion, it is irrefutable that there are various ways of learning a foreign culture, including books, films and the internet. However, it is my firm conviction that travelling is one of the most optimal ways of acquiring an understanding of other countries in light of the described reasons above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29357798165 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0377025908 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574923547401 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.6915990333 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.25 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21853698364 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793347727454 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750809281545 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133993639871 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339686961936 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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