It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

Essay topics:

It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

Recently, juvenile crime has been increasing rapidly. It is very sorrowful news. When they start to a life of the future, accidental or aforethought do to mistake and bad things. Some people believe that juvenile crime is when they were violence and I disagree with them.

Because this problem has two slides. For example, a few years ago, a father who likes hunting and one time he forgot to charged his gun at home. Unfortunately, his children found the gun while playing. Then the oldest son accidentally shoots his sister and the miserable girl died on the spot. It was a sad case.

But some cases show that teenagers plan to do crime before that. As well as, some parents too much caress their children and it might kids would grow becoming who are arbitrary, angry and do not have a dream. Namely, one case; my son said to me his classmates fought out of spite. If one of them gets any injury, other children would shoulder responsible ahead of legal. Thus, people need to think before doing something.

In my opinion, If parents will not want to pull the door of jail for their children, they should teach social skills and kind behavior. Therefore, I think that children would learn to love other people and will be self-reliant. If we can give correct education for our children, they will not do any crime and they can step to their future full of hope.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e violence and I disagree with them. Because this problem has two slides. For exampl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, i think, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1129.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62704918033 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41199231624 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.655737704918 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7499001862 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.4117647059 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3529411765 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145951481157 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463404747753 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649134354683 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0865195429612 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617855194652 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.0946893788 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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