A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in computer age has more advantages than disadvantages?
Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.
In our contemporary world, individuals cannot imagine their life without technological devices, because mobile devices play an indispensable role in everyday life There are some disadvantages of living in technological era, however, I think that drawbacks of this phenomenon outweighed by its advantages.
On the one hand, there are some disadvantages of living in the age of computers. Firstly, excessive phone usage can cause social media addiction which is detrimental for human beings. In other words, due to the social media we waste our precious time looking at the screen of a laptop or mobile phone instead of talking to our family members. Therefore, majority of children are growing up without parental care and attention, as a result, crime rate is increasing dramatically. As an example, scientists claim that in many countries around the world, the rate of offences carried out by teenagers is growing. Moreover, mobile phones and gadgets made us less sociable, however, there are social media platforms that give us opportunity to find friends, namely, Instagram and Facebook. By the way of explanation, on these platforms, it is possible to collect millions of subscribers who are interested in the life of someone they follow, so the account owner will focus on attracting complete strangers to create a fan base , instead of spending time with their close friends, due to this they lose their own friends and becoming lonely.
On the flip side, living in age of technology brings numerous benefits. First of all, there is various facilities on the internet for those who eager to earn money without leaving home, therefore today, there are more wealthy people compared to the previous years, when there was no opportunity to make money while sitting at home. For example, traders and brokers can make $ 2,000 in a day from the comfort of their homes. Besides, due to social media it is easy to have an access to the educational material. In addition, there are applications which have been created by specialists in order to make the learning process easier. For insurance, Youtube is the best learning app where plethora of information about certain subject is uploaded by professionals.
In conclusion, despite some disadvantages of living in digital age, I suppose that IT age facilitated our life by providing us with the opportunity to learn and earn without much effort.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, i suppose, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, by the way, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16195372751 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89448764924 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588688946015 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.7132112261 49.4020404114 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.866666667 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6666666667 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184894997269 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606265892823 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765118135002 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128010716687 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480237811061 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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