As major cities in the world are growing today, so do their problems. What are problems for young people who are living in the cities as the result of continued growth? How problems might be solved?
Nowadays, the expansion of metropolitan cities triggers several detrimental effects on the youngsters dwelling in them. In my perspective, its drawbacks accounted for crime and the provision of vocational institutes would be the solution for it.
Admittedly, the growth of major cities is beneficial for these groups of people in terms of occupations, but it also enhances competitiveness. Firstly, those who lack ability and qualifications may become unemployed; thus, rising level of crime. In fact, becoming a metropolis attracts many foreign enterprises’ investment providing vacancies for young job seekers from all regions especially, overseas ones who have sufficient capability and skills to apply. Besides, those indigenous who are not qualified may undergo a low living standard since they are obligated to be blue-collar workers offered poor working conditions and low salaries. As a result, they have to commit crimes such as drug dealers and thieves to ensure and maintain their survival.
Therefore, the government should implement some measures to tackle it since its impacts on young people are inevitable. Firstly, the vocational institutes play an essential role in hampering this issue. As a matter of the fact, these institutes can allow the youth to approach advanced technologies and appropriate qualifications, and having a good grasp of knowledge can enhance the capability of competitiveness, reducing the unemployment rates and improving their living standard. To illustrate, there are several community colleges in every district of Ho Chi Minh city providing vocational education with free tuition for the youngsters since authorities desire to boost their workmanship and reduce the number of offenders within communities.
In conclusion, this expansion cause disadvantages to the young native denizens since it enhances the tension between them and foreigners in terms of occupation. Thus, the government should provide more vocational institutes to mitigate its negative effects.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82154882155 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25797203064 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2914272411 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.0 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153756881075 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050092837868 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399611356651 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837939214397 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465313331645 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.31 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82154882155 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25797203064 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2914272411 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.0 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153756881075 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050092837868 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399611356651 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837939214397 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465313331645 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.31 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.