Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can get a job when leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that criminals have strong connection to a low level of education so to educate offenders is the foremost solution to tackle this issue since they can get a job after prisoning. In my perspective, I totally agree to this view due to its benefits from sustainable society.
On the one hand, to provide education for offenders seems to be unessential due to several reasons. Firstly, they get used to committing crime so it is really tough to make them change their behaviors. In fact, most of them have a difficulty background, so they usually become school leavers at an early stage to enter the life to earn a living. Moreover, due to the lack of comprehensively basic knowledge, they do not have capability to chase the learning paths. For instance, in Vietnam, some offenders such as drug dealers and murders tend to offend again even they are educated in educational institutes. Thus, if government approve a measure to invest money for this, it would be a huge money wasting, affecting the financial budget of country.
On the other hand, I still concur that its contribution to reduce proportion of offender is inevitable. The first and foremost reason for this is that, it could strengthen the sustainable society if government increase the provision of vocational institutes for offenders. As a matter of the fact, a number of them have commit the crime due to the insufficient salaries, so it offers them an opportunity to approach advanced technology and they can put the knowledge they gained into occupation which bring them high income, rising their living standard and mitigating the growth level of crime. For instance, in some countries, prisoners enroll courses in which they can accumulate some certificate required in jobs such as blue collars, craftsmen, so they contribute their efforts to erect the sustainability of society.
In conclusion, criminals who are provided education can resist commit crime again since they have a stable career prospects after prison duty, deterring the growth level of crime and strengthen the social sustainability. Thus government should spend more money on vocational institutes to urgently tackle it.
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Suggestion: committed
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, so, still, then, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13521126761 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93856962318 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56338028169 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2328353948 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.214285714 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31704931016 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100332481186 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803107717665 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204992107016 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481845552395 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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