Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a controversial argument that if the young offenders committed crimes, they would have sentences as equally as the older ones. In my perspective, I totally disagree with this viewpoint since its negative effects can ruin their health.
On the one hand, applying punishments for mature criminals seems to be more effective than others due to several reasons. Firstly, it ensures the equality of society. Thanks to the incapacitation, young lawbreakers have to undergo a sense of loneliness accounting for living remotely from the community, so they are forced to carefully consider their negative behaviors and the effects that they caused. As a result, the feeling of regret encourages them to have redemption and counter the temptation of recidivism. For instance, besides, capital punishment, the captive penalty was one of the most common approaches of many judges in all global regimes since it might have successfully prevented offenders from offenses.
On the other hand, while it can bring a huge benefit to the community, its detrimental impacts on young people are inevitable. Firstly, they would suffer from physical and mental health. In fact, the immature ones may suffer the risk of deficiency of nutrient foods and other social relationships during the prisoning period and it causes unrecoverable damage to their mature processes such as malnutrition and family affection. Thus, to ensure their stable development, a deterrent such as community service should be considered since particular activities can both enhance the image of the community and the awareness of being criminals. For instance, in some countries, juvenile delinquent undertakes street cleaning and raising animals as a sanction for their sin.
In conclusion, although penalties for adults may hamper people commit crimes again, the authorities should have careful consideration when using them for youngsters to mitigate detrimental effects on them
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...ed crimes, they would have sentences as equally as the older ones. In my perspective, I to...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50841750842 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95883550903 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612794612795 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4394618053 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.846153846 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101538248177 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318774013712 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462531929693 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755119186747 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530210717673 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...ed crimes, they would have sentences as equally as the older ones. In my perspective, I to...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50841750842 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95883550903 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612794612795 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4394618053 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.846153846 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101538248177 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318774013712 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462531929693 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755119186747 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530210717673 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.