13. Animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities on land and in sea. Why has this happened? What's the solution?
It is believed that many terrestrial and marine animal species are in endangered as human actions in natural environments. I reckoned that this issue stems from habitat destructions and overpopulation which should be tackled by a particular measure
The negative consequences of this issue are inevitable. Firstly, the growth of the population puts tremendous pressure on the environment. the more population increases, the more animal species are being caught to maintain human lives. The over-exploiting causes the extinctions of aquatic animals such as tunas and salmons, and the deforestation inland to build the key infrastructure such as shelter and cultivate agricultural lands attribute to the habitat degradation of land species. Secondly, industrial development triggers habitat destruction. The waste from the operation of factories such as toxic chemicals and global warming emissions are the roots of the degradation of natural surroundings. For instance, Amazon tropical rain forest and Australian coral reefs could be vanished by the rise of global warming.
Government should impose measurement to mitigate these effects. Firstly, the investment in sanitation systems to minimize the industrial issues. These systems implement the function of removing toxic waste from water and carbon dioxide which is the main factor of global warming from fumes. Besides, the government should impose strong punishments for companies undermining the natural environment by directly release them to the surroundings. For instance, the American sued the petrol company related to the oil spill in the Mexico Gulf. Secondly, technology development can contribute to animal preservations. Thanks to advanced technology, humans can explicitly conserve animals by growing and taking care of endangered species in artificial environments to ensure their survival and then releasing them back to nature. Besides that, the biology breakthroughs such as gene technologies can contribute to the protection and the reborn of endangered species
In conclusion, the extinction of animals is a consequence of many detrimental issues but the population bloom and degradation of natural habitat is the foremost one. Thus government should curb this by investing in sanitation systems and technologies
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, then, thus, as to, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 8.3376753507 336% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81845238095 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20194804783 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 11.0 2.52805611222 435% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2642879176 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141976240262 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407132781016 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481670860436 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957985408153 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240207268622 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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