More and more people want to own famous brands of cars, clothes and other items. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive trend?
Nowadays people desire to consume merchandise provided by famous brands such as Gucci or Nike than other ones. In my perspective, this negative tendency is stemming from the advertisement which affects individuals and societies.
Admittedly, the consumption of renowned products is inevitable due to several reasons. Firstly, the development of advertisement can stimulate it. The famous enterprises utilize electronic platforms and leaflets as a means of marketing to contribute the full outstanding features to consumers, enhancing the possibility to meet their demands, so facilitating the growth of consumption. Furthermore, these firms also sponsor celebrities to become the ambassador of their products; for instance, Nike pays a huge amount of money to Cristiano Ronaldo, a football idol of many youngsters to gain an endorsement in their sports clothes advertisement. Thus, the advertisement plays a crucial role in assisting these brands to provide commodities to customers.
Nevertheless, this is a root of detrimental effects to individuals and societies. Firstly, consuming famous items can undermine the youngster. They have no awareness to resist attraction coming from them due to their age, so they easily become those goods addicted. If their family finance does not allow them to satisfice their passion, they might commit the crime to afford to consume brand’s products, deteriorating their personalities. For instance, in Vietnam, the adolescents turning into drug dealers and thieves prevail over other crimes due to the huge expense that brings to them. Thus, this tendency is a burden not only for their family but societies since it degrades those who are the future of countries in morality and behavior aspects.
In conclusion, I strongly concur that this proclivity can trigger the negative effects than positive ones. Therefore, adults, educations and government must take a giant leap to educate children to avoid its disadvantages
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Suggestion:
...cate children to avoid its disadvantages
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62626262626 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14697217814 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639730639731 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5457533527 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163392427897 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527873391083 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046346480774 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103070010913 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444283786292 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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