Some people think that good health is a basic human-need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages?
Nowadays, the profit-making conglomerate response to take care of individual health by running the medical services while some people concur that the government should play this role. I decline the merit than the demerit due to its convenience and expense
On the one hand, this tendency is the root of some negative effects. Firstly, the individual health insurance of the government is excluded in private hospitals, leading to the exorbitantly higher cost for service treatments. To benefit from the cost reduction of these services, the patients and their families have to pay the amount of money that depends on the annual policies of companies to access the treatments at a reasonable price, causing the burden for their monthly salaries. Secondly, the disqualified doctors hired by these companies can trigger the risk of false diagnoses. In spite of the life of the patients, chasing profit is the ultimate goal of these firms so the usage of doctors who lack of experience and qualities can bring a huge benefit to private hospitals by saving a lot of money for expert ones. As a result, the quality of services cannot meet the patient’s expectations leading to a significant decrease in the number of illness people who come for health diagnoses and treatments
On the other hand, this tendency also brings undoubtedly positive effects. Firstly, people can benefit from the rivalry of companies and the government at the expense of medical services such as drug prices. To attract more consumers using their products, the enterprises usually drop the price of products lower than its price in the market, facilitating the diverse consumptions in drug products providing by them. As a result, people might have a chance to approach the good drugs with the mitigation in the cost, saving a lot of money spending for them every month. Secondly, the time-consuming for the waiting list is waived by individual services, exceeding the convenience of consumers. If patients have life-threatening issues that require an emergency in a short time, the private hospitals can be prioritized since the intervention in time with precise treatments can save them instead of general hospitals where are always full of patients. Furthermore, these hospitals are expanding to less accessible regions to ensure that many customers can approach adequately medical health care and limit the overload situation of government health facilities.
In conclusion, despite the drawbacks of medical health care being provided by corporations, I reckon the merits are overwhelming the demerits by its convenience and expense.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, i reckon, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 415.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30361445783 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95689848613 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518072289157 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9267880941 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.214285714 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6428571429 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3571428571 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204893262243 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737590293034 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073183343772 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147471599553 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505567520134 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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