Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines.
Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?
The question of whether we should oblige parents to immunise their children against common diseases is a social rather than a medical one. Since we are free to choose what we eat or drink or how much exercise we take, why should the medical treatment we decide to undergo be any different?
Medical researchers and governments are primarily interested in overall statistics and trends and in money-saving schemes, which fail to take into consideration the individual's concerns and rights. While immunisation against diseases such as tetanus and whooping cough may be effective, little information is released about the harmful effects of vaccinations, which can sometimes result in growth problems in children or even death.
The body is designed to resist disease and to create its own natural immunity through contact with that disease. When children are given artificial immunity, we create a vulnerable society, which is entirely dependent on immunisation. In the event that mass immunisation programmes were to cease, the society as a whole would be more at risk than ever before.
In addition there is the issue of the rights of the individual. As members of a society, why should we be obliged to subject our children to this potentially harmful practice? Some people may also be against immunisation on religious grounds and their needs must be considered when any decisions are made.
For these reasons I feel strongly that immunisation programmes should not be obligatory and that the individual should have the right to choose whether or not to participate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether we should oblige parents to immunise th...
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Line 7, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...be more at risk than ever before. In addition there is the issue of the rights of the...
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Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ividual should have the right to choose whether or not to participate.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220588235294 0.247107183377 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.158088235294 0.155533422707 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0919117647059 0.0946595960268 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0404411764706 0.0501214627716 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0441176470588 0.0437548338989 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128676470588 0.122226691241 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0220588235294 0.0403226058552 55% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92614544627 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0404411764706 0.0326793684256 124% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0845588235294 0.0861772015684 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0367647058824 0.021408717616 172% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0330882352941 0.011925033212 277% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1576.0 1933.35771543 82% => OK
No of words: 253.0 316.048096192 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.22924901186 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20517956788 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.418972332016 0.374742101984 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.328063241107 0.28420135186 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221343873518 0.203846283523 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134387351779 0.137316102897 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92614544627 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.037074148 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.56093040696 109% => OK
Word variations: 64.4033995603 60.7387585426 106% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0891783567 68% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.7743622355 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5259697645 49.517814964 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.272727273 127.492653851 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7743622355 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.814263465372 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 55.8063241107 49.1944974215 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.5303030303 1.69124875643 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425232709662 0.332605444948 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100098392556 0.102741220458 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0448327864873 0.0668466124924 67% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.6331243849 0.534860350844 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158360996379 0.148594505496 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175922079351 0.134430193775 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989637044021 0.0742795772207 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.20542280876 0.324371583561 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0553074294225 0.0638462369009 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258110735989 0.228012699653 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824558559816 0.058150111329 142% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 1.0 5.90881763527 17% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 10.4468937876 67% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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