In many cities young people prefer shopping as a form of leisure activity, why do you think this happens and is positive or negative development?
It has become a common phenomenon that some youngsters have an urgent deserve of buying things and show-off to other people. And even in some case, those young generation buying thing just because most people buy it and ignore whether it is useful to them or not. Because of this trend, they tend to spend more time and money on shopping than the pass.
Firstly, with the fast technology development of mass media tools, youngsters have more opportunity to get in touch with the latest fashion. Some company and designers have produced very attractive advertisements and invited famous celebrities to endorse their productions, to make the production become a fashion to youngsters. Obviously it works very well, but sometimes it leads to overburden on young people’s pocket when they just want to keep in pace with those fashion. Moreover, people who are not style-conscious fans also cannot escape from advertisements and herb effect. When seeing lots of people surrounded using the production, they tend to but the same one, to ensure that they keep in pace with others. However, those advertisers’ tricks like this affect people’s determination and making them more and more shopping than ever.
In my opinion, this is a negative trend since young people are wasting their money by buying things they actually don’t need. Too much shopping, whatever going shopping or online shopping, can affect youngsters’ work and life and some of them even are out of money because of impulse consumption. At last, young people should spend time and money on active leisure than other activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22988505747 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88159796246 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6825295258 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.75 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130240917971 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517453531327 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386760968657 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941802049769 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028365116756 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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