Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional past times than spending all day indoors.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The technology advancement make the world change every moment which totally unlike the past. A truth is, traditional education method which useful in the past may useless in today society. One aspect is parents have no choice but to let their kids exposed to computers from an early age. However, it also raising the question of whether children are too dependent on them. In this essay I will talk about this question.
The danger of over-depending on computers is that they can greatly affect personal health. It is obviously that children who staying on a computer screen for too long can have eyesight problem. Also the X-ray and radiation can cause headache and other health problems. Moreover, the more time that children spend on computer, the less time they can spend on their relatives and friends. And it badly affect daily life for a kid who rely on computer.
The danger aside, computers also bring many benefits that we have to consider and applaud. Our life have more and more full of computer, and it make the life much convenient than the past. So that makes the computer skills particularly important. For instant, many companies start replacing humans with a computer-controlled machine to fast the speed of product. So many parents let their kids learn programming course in primary school, and wish them to become a programmer in the future. In this case, it is inevitable that children will become more likely addicted on computers.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that everything that humans use has two sides. Learning computer skills is important, but too much time on it affect person’s health. I believe that parents should help their children to keep balance time between computer and outdoor activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... an early age. However, it also raising the question of whether children are too dependent on them. In ...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...for too long can have eyesight problem. Also the X-ray and radiation can cause heada...
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Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...eir relatives and friends. And it badly affect daily life for a kid who rely on comput...
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Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
... more and more full of computer, and it make the life much convenient than the past....
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Line 9, column 190, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the life much convenient than the past. So that makes the computer skills particularly ...
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Line 9, column 401, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...t. So many parents let their kids learn programming course in primary school, and wish them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04827586207 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6909457558 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.9979223298 49.4020404114 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0526315789 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208949660032 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608222071186 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405423911554 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121960538648 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167415373562 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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