Many companies invest their money in sport games for advertisement purposes. Some people think it is good for the sport world, while others believe that it has some disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Essay topics:

Many companies invest their money in sport games for advertisement purposes. Some people think it is good for the sport world, while others believe that it has some disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The shocking phenomenon of changing interest of money in to sports advertisement recently comes to the forefront. Some feel that it will have an antagonistic effect on the sports world. However, I agree with those who say that this give amenity to sports world for obtaining new talent along with new skills for preparation. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer a viewpoint on this matter.

Regarding those who feel that capitalizing in to endorsement of athletics does not help; there exists a valid reason. The main justification is that players get engrossed toward money and practice less for the sports. The Alaska reported just last week that sports players of Alaska who get sponsored get less time for practice as they get involved in some other types of business.

Nevertheless, I cannot hold the notion in good conscience. The fact is that individuals who got sponsor become motivated and practice well. The Harvard reported those Asian citizens, who got early sponsors they attained new skills and now they get hold of the game. The Harvard report indicated that with the ingenuity of many companies’ teams proved that it helps them in their foster process; those who are always considered underdog are now the leading winners.

In sum, if everyone puts a moratorium on a belief that investing money in sports game for advertising purpose. I hope that soon everyone understands how this helps sports players and turns up the game.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer a viewpoint on this matter. ...
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Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ills and now they get hold of the game. The Harvard report indicated that with the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74881501742 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2447526188 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3076923077 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267290508469 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913967699489 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708003889214 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160135074882 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794363401919 0.056905535591 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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