Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic development, but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic development, but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

One of the highly controversial issues today relates to that of economic development. Many nations have a goal towards improvement of living standards, nevertheless few relevant social factors might be damaged. In my opinion, the advantages including improvements in public sector far outweigh drawbacks including lack of family time.

The main drawback of economy improvement is losing of family values and relations. In other words, developments require more time and intensive routine, and as a result people start working harder which leads to the loss of quality time with their families. A recent study found that in 2010 in the United States family connections decreased by 30% due to long hours at work. Consequently, family relations might be under affect in developed countries.

On the other hand, I believe that the main benefit of economic development will be improvement of public services, such as health, defense, employability and education. In other words, a country with working economy tends to increase investments and improvements over goods and services that will result in high living standards. For instance, Singapore holds third place among economically developed countries in terms of education and innovations. This is the reason why countries should have a mission statement towards improvements of public services.

To conclude, it is argued that countries with developed economies have issues with family relations and connections. I am inclined to believe while there some drawbacks such as loss of social values, the plus points of economy development, such as increase of public services far outweigh the negative ones.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, nevertheless, so, third, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53333333333 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9807430134 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2146419252 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.538461538 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241764375396 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805980681232 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350583502101 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141017081904 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477055301504 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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