In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Childhood obesity has become an alarming sign of deteriorating public health over the world. In this regard, some people believe governments should do whatever is needed to prevent obesity in children. However, I believe that the responsibility of the citizen is the most important key for combating the overweight children crisis.
Ensuring the well-being of its people is one of the government's fundamental role. That is to say, if there is any serious threat to the people, such as childhood obesity, the government will warn and implement effective solutions. Nevertheless, apart from encouraging regular exercise and healthy eating habits, I do not feel that the government can do more things.
The duty to controvert obesity at younger generation should not fall on governments alone, as parents are, for good reason, a greater source of influence on their children's life. It can be seen that obese children are often malnourished because they do not receive appropriate nutrition from their food, a truth that reveals parents' poor choice of diet for their kids. This fact also suggests that parents can have a direct impact on improving their children's health by choosing healthy eating patterns that contain less sugar and fat. To elaborate, a recent Harvard School of Public Health study, which tracked the diet and lifestyle habits of 120,000 children for up to 20 years, found that children who increased their intake of fruit juice gained more weight over time than those who did not. On the other hand, obesity is also caused by lack of physical activity. This can be exemplified the sedentary lifestyle favoured by a large amount of youth nowadays and parents are the only ones who can either encourage or force their children to do more physical tasks or exercise.
In conclusion, of course, the government should do what they can to curb the obesity epidemic but can not also ignore the responsibility of parents because they play a vital role in this war. Therefore, proper care is required from both the government and parents.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, apart from, in conclusion, of course, such as, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09792284866 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71039946614 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578635014837 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0953255545 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.714285714 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0714285714 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200518006569 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735104675173 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565792379748 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138624197142 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497130369335 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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