In many countries children are becoming overweight and unhealthy Some people think that the government should have the responsibility what extent do you agree or disagree

It is irrefutable that the topic of children's obesity has been discussed more significantly over the past few years in several countries. It is considered by many that government must take appropriate steps for tackling this issue. I have the balance opinion for this statement, due to the fact that government is not fully responsible for this issue. Also, parents and schools should also take initiatives to solve this problem.

Firstly, overweight occurs only when there is a lack of physical activities and inappropriate diet. Due to the advancement of technology, kids have been more indolent which leads to obesity. However, with the studies, schools must be aware about the arrangement of physical training sessions for the students to make them conscious about the fitness. For instance, sports can be the best way to improve the fitness or skills of the children. Secondly, parents should also look in to the diet of their offsprings, whether they are eating healthy and nutritous food or not.

On the other hand, responsibility of the government is to build as many as sports centers for the youngsters. Moreover, they should also reduce the prices of the nutritional foods through which people can afford those foodstuffs easily.

To conclude, government is not only the responsible for improving youngsters obesity, but also parents and schools must take foot forward for it.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1174.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 225.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21777777778 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83592474086 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604444444444 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 506.74238477 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.2979194354 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.8333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133344199713 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512635465 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03136064568 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867341075733 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311877521157 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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