In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recent decades have witnessed the prevalence of obesity in the young generation, raising many questions of its impacts on their health. Although the proposal of governments’ liability for this epidemic sounds legitimate, it is actually the mutual responsibility of the authorities and citizens themselves.
On the one hand, it should be acknowledged that government should be responsible for this health problem. The local government should enact the legislation of monetary fine on any food processing companies with the intent of producing convenience food. These products are invariably associated with the excessive fat content, making consumers especially children more susceptible to obesity.
On the other hand, there are many reasons why it is highly recommended that parents and children themselves be responsible for their obesity. First, children should abandon their sedentary lifestyle and take up some sports exercises on a regular basis. This is proved to act as a deterrent for the excessive fat accumulation and promote the blood circulation and metabolism process, improving their health status. Second, parents should organize the scientific dietary plans balancing the intake of different nutrients. For example, a meal with sufficient vegetables and seeds would not only supply the basic nutrient elements for the development of young individuals, thereby reducing their fat consumption.
In conclusion, I partially disagree with the view that government should have the responsibility. In fact, it demands much effort from both official authorities and young people themselves to curb this obesity epidemic through the prohibition of fat food, better lifestyle and more nutrient dietary plans.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8188976378 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09929301797 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610236220472 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6125803168 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.166666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1498114131 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621822921237 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628960195347 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939855522632 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277518525549 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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