In many countries today, if people want to find a job, they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Opinions diverge on whether leaving homes seeking for job opportunities does more harm than good to working individuals. The merits of this movement, however, overshadow its drawback.
Admittedly, moving away from families and friends causes mental health badly. When you stay along in strange places, there is no one beside you to share stories or get advice in your daily life. Furthermore, being isolated for long time create negative thought lead to depression, anxiety disorder, and paranoia. These problems affect your mood, behavior and thinking and it reduces the working efficiency. Hence, it does a disservice to the worker’s mental health.
Conversely, work far away from home should be seen in a positive light due to enlarge relationships and learn more survival skills. Regarding people who move away from families and friends expand more relationships. This can be explained by the fact that working in another city we have to meet a huge number of strangers in the company or in daily life. Take my brother who moves to Ho Chi Minh city for find a job as an exemplary model when he stays in there for 3 years, he has about one hundred new friends over a year. Additionally, on occasion your survival skills will leap. Without assistance from family, you have to do everything by yourself in daily life to become an independent person. For example, cooking, cleaning, decision making, controling your money to improve your skill and help in some urgent situations. Therefore, these benefit make you become successful person in both professional and personal life.
By way of conclusion, i assure that moving away family and friends to find jobs could be conductive to your occupation and behaviour.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, furthermore, hence, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10283687943 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7621017862 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8137043375 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9375 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206715924075 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661519933729 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704204047858 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125221496103 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054404247273 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.