In many countries women join the army as men do However some people argue that the army solely needs males What is your opinion

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In many countries, women join the army as men do. However, some people argue that the army solely needs males. What is your opinion?

Some people argue that military conscription should only be applicable to men despite the fact that women have set foot in nearly every walk of life. Personally, I completely agree with the point of view that females can contribute to the army just as males do for a range of reasons.

First and foremost it could be argued that the primary standpoint to conscript females is that they now have more chances to receive an education. In comparison with the past, where the army recruitment policies focused on strength and fitness, the current focus is on academic ability. As a result of this, physical fighting either armed or unarmed no longer features in modern warfare. It has been replaced by battles between tanks, armors, missiles or warplanes, most of which are computerized. Another important reason could be thought that the inborn merits of women would probably stand them in good stead. It is evident that females are less likely to commit errors, as they are accustomed to dealing with matters with accuracy and caution. Patience, the endurance of hardships especially in grueling conditions and consideration of others account for the high presence of females in army hospitals or logistics departments.

Notwithstanding their strengths females have some limitations they may need to overcome. The first obstacle is social attitudes. Females have to cope with the pressure exerted by their families or friends as serving the armies is widely accepted as a deadly job, which is predominantly for males. The second one is sexual discrimination and harassment which seems quite common in most armies and can discourage women from military service.

In conclusion, it is understandable that women’s enrolment in the army is acceptable for several reasons mentioned above.

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Average: 8.3 (5 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25783972125 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88852485879 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627177700348 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3630081124 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.785714286 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186580148778 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553117817739 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450770253882 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12337842008 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417773350046 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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