In many country, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think university graduates who become new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for a few decades. What is your view?

Essay topics:

In many country, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think university graduates who become new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for a few decades. What is your view?

It is sometimes argued that doctors and teachers fresh out of universities should be required to work in rural regions for several decades. While I admit that this scheme makes sense to some extent, I do believe that having such mandatory service could backfire. (没有be)

I can understand why some people want newly-graduated doctors and teachers to work in the countryside. For people living in rural areas, if the government makes working in the countryside compulsory for new doctors and teachers, many of whom would otherwise work in large cities for a lucrative career, they would be on a position to access advanced medical care and education services provided by well-educated professionals. It therefore could be argued that this policy could serve the function of extending rural dwellers' life expectancy, fostering the next generation possessing expertise and knowledge, and therefore boosting local economic growth. For doctors and teachers who are fresh from universities, working in rural areas would provide them the opportunity of translating theoretical knowledge into practice and advancing practical skills, thus building up their confidence early on in their careers. Such chances are less available in the working world in urban areas where many experienced senior doctors and teachers dominate the workplace, leaving few opportunities of hands-on learning for newcomers.

Nevertheless, I still believe that the benefit of forcing university graduates to work in rural areas could not justify its negative impacts. Firstly, such mandatory service is unfair for students graduating with huge students loans that require them to pay off as the salaries in underdeveloped areas are generally lower than that in big cities. Secondly, it would cause resentment and demotivation among young physicians and teachers who are sent to rural regions against their will, leading to job dissatisfaction and undesirable working performance.
Lastly, the greater concern is that when it comes time for these doctors and teachers to relocate to cities, they may find it difficult to catch up with the rapidly changing work environment in developed areas after working for several decades in rural areas where have limited access to cutting-edge technology and continual education.

In conclusion, although it is not unreasonable to require doctors and teachers who newly graduate from universities to work in the countryside, to my mind, having such requirement compulsory could do more harm than good.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dwellers'' or 'dweller's'?
Suggestion: dwellers'; dweller's
...d serve the function of extending rural dwellers life expectancy, fostering the next gen...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56623376623 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9927375974 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566233766234 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.6616325932 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.583333333 106.682146367 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0833333333 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34615367351 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12997524955 0.084324248473 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063549536237 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183278053847 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466122577968 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 13.0946893788 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.62 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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