many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison.What do you think are the causes of this?What possible solutions can you suggest?

Essay topics:

many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison.

What do you think are the causes of this?

What possible solutions can you suggest?

A massive number of offenders commit a felony after they are freed from prison. In this essay, I am going to name some causes related to this and introduce a solution for each of them.

This problem seems to have stemmed from the fact that criminals learn from each other in prisons. A person who has committed a minor crime might go to prison and learn the newest techniques from offenders who are experienced, hence coming out with a brilliant idea for breaking the law. A solution for preventing it from happening is to prompt the people who committed minor crimes to do community services. With doing community services, it can lead to a better society, in that society can benefit from their contribution, and prison does not produce dangerous criminals.

Other than the first cause, not being skilled to start a business also lies at the root of instantly committing a crime. Offenders are used to earning money in an illegal way. Hardly does a person occupied with skills, earn money illegally. So, it can be guaranteed that they are going to behave if we teach them how to start a business. Some prison has already started to hold workshops for prisoners to help them to be an entrepreneur. Not only can we help them to be more self-esteemed to start a new legal career, but also we can have more productive workforces for our community.

In conclusion, there are some minor problems that cause criminals to instantly commit crime after being freed from prison, namely, learning a new way of committing felony from their peers and not having enough talents to start a business. These problems, however, can be tackled in a straightforward way.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an illegal way" with adverb for "illegal"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...me. Offenders are used to earning money in an illegal way. Hardly does a person occupied with ski...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a straightforward way" with adverb for "straightforward"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...These problems, however, can be tackled in a straightforward way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83916083916 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68595426897 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0744853357 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8571428571 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224071882485 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819031424831 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531483827418 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154424758595 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496604113354 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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