Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar; which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
It is widely argued that sugary products are supposed to set a higher price to stop people from consuming them without limitation because high level of sugar may contribute to many healthy issues. From my perpective, I trend to disagree with this idea, I think make sugary products more expensive is not the only and the best way to solve the sugar problems.
In fact, the higher price doesn't have a significant influence as some people think, and sometimes it could be negative. Firstly, the price of sugary products is not low, and there are still my poor children can't afford buying candies or drinks, it is unfair for them to increase the price. Secondly, sugar can offer energies to physical bodies and it could be useful only if be used appropriatly, more expensive price may cause bad effects on those really need it. Finally, sugary products are help to keep positive attitude as well. For Example, when I was at university, I was alway stressful during the test month and candy -the most common sugary products could help me get out of depression.
There are some other measures could be taken by government to avoid people eat too many sugar food. On the one hand, government should take efforts to develop the realiazation of what healthy problems sugar would bring among the public, such as holding health lecture in communities or schools monthly and add the warnings on the label of sugary products. On the other hand, government has to establish a strict supervision on the levels of sugar that factories put into their products. Measures like enrolling a relative law or checking the levels of sugar inside products more often will be effective.
In conclusion, making sugary products more expensive is not a ideal solution which may hurt others right and hard to achieve people's imagic results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to buy'.
Suggestion: to buy
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sugar seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much sugar', 'a good deal of sugar'.
Suggestion: much sugar; a good deal of sugar
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8932038835 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51110581885 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601941747573 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.7156736724 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4166666667 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367896555967 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126137417112 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598506399983 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214688676111 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576779225066 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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