Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older while others think they should stay at home with the family Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

For the most part, parents all over the world almost encourage their children to leave home when they become older. While, others assume that the young should stay at home with family. I am in favor of both and I will elaborate with my opinion.

In the first place, one of the benefits of leaving home when they grow up is independence and freedom. When they find a new home and move into it, they will have to earn a living to afford their demand. Therefore, this provides some opportunity to young people to live a life on their terms and make any decisions by themself without the interference of their parents. Living alone still brings them a lot of life skills which are essential skills to achievement in their job. Let’s take an example, they can try to do the housework, go to the groceries and then cook a delicious meal by themself.

However, living with family isn’t a bad idea. Since it’s a fantastic way to boost family bonding and have the best time with loved ones. This not only gives them a happy time but also it can teach them how to love people around themself, to become a person who always cares about others. For example, in my country, the young will live with their family until they are married with their husband/wife or they can live together even if married. I think it’s a good thing to improve the bond between parents and children, grandparents and grandchildren and not create any generation gap.

In conclusion, although the parents encourage young people to leave alone to build independence and confidence, the choice to live with their family is not bad and good to tighten their relationship with family.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70205479452 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46944881004 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568493150685 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3559660937 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0714285714 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357143216491 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124288210444 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097618700233 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240691308282 0.151304729494 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130242527572 0.056905535591 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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