Many people are now spending more and more time travelling to work or school Some people believe that this is a negative development while others think there are some benefits Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many people are now spending more and more time travelling to work or school. Some people believe that this is a negative development while others think there are some benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In modern life, many people prefer spending their traveling time on working or studying. While some opinions think in favour that this trend brings us some benefits, I would argue that it is better if we can balance them.
On the one hand, we cannot deny that spending more time on working and studying gives youngsters some advantages. First of all, young people obviously can allocate more time to improve themselves through workplaces or schools if they spent less on tourism places. In other words, youngers have more time to build up their future career prospects with higher positions and salaries. Secondly, people probably save a considerable amount of money and then they can allocate their saving money on more important issues. Goods and services are prohibitively expensive at well-known attractions where always are thronged with tourists in the height of the tourism season, and therefore, spending money on these places seemly is unnecessary.
On the other hand, in a practical way, I believe that it is better if we allocate an appropriate amount of money and time on traveling for many reasons. Firstly, traveling enables people to deeply understand what they study in the classes and keep up with current knowledge. It is undoubted that exploration is a crucial innate characteristic of humans, so people would get a great deal of studying opportunities through ecotourism, wildlife safaris, historical sites and so on. Secondly, people feel less exhausted by traveling, which helps them work and study more efficiently. While modern residents easily come down with stressful routine in big cities, some psychologist encourages us to increase our living standards by sometimes getting away from it all through family outings or packaged holidays.
In conclusion, although spending more traveling time on working and studying sounds beneficial, I think that tourism would keep us healthy so that we can study and work more efficiently.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27564102564 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79336439001 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570512820513 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5024314086 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.615384615 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347002560278 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124167966202 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694893215082 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22842019923 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505969345298 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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