Many people feel that urban environments are more unhealthy than they have ever been. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What measures can be effective in tackling this problem?
In this day and age, a large number of towns and large cities are experiencing the serious pollution which makes an adverse impact on human’s health. This situation is the direct result of several factors but many approaches exist to address this issue.
The staggering pace of urbanization as well as the great demand for ameliorating economic situation of each country contribute to the pollution of natural surroundings. Evidently, the vast area of forests cut down to make room for the erection of skyscrapers, hotels and the like shed light on the poor quality of atmosphere in numerous metropolises. Moreover, illegal manufacturing activities of various companies are also the primary factors leading to the contaminated nature. For example, a multi-billion dollar steel mill in Vietnam discharged tons of toxic chemicals and waste water into ocean through a secret sewage pipe, which resulted in the “mass fish deaths” phenomenon. The result of this is that not only does it affect negatively to the beauty of towns but it is also likely to deteriorate local residents’ health.
A long-term solution to this predicament is that the government should launch a publicity campaign in the media and in schools to educate people about the fundamentals of making the city environment healthier. In fact, children can be taught about how to conserve the nature through lessons. As a result, they can possibly teach their parents about the things they learnt at school and adults will also be influenced by this initiative. Japanese students are truly exemplary examples. Actually, they are taught about the consequences of climate change and global warming caused by people’s irresponsible activities so that they all know to classify different kinds of trash or use paper bags instead of plastic ones.
In conclusion, although cities nowadays less benefits human’s health, the root cause can be tackled with several simple strategies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
In this day and age, a large number of towns and large cities are experiencing...
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Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...ture through lessons. As a result, they can possibly teach their parents about the things th...
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Line 4, column 41, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun benefits is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...In conclusion, although cities nowadays less benefits human’s health, the root cause...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32038834951 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92417700493 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644012944984 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5044376748 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.461538462 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162291093769 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518336863194 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456475897604 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944660045802 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043868322026 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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