Many people say that family is the most powerful influence on a child’s development. However, some people suppose that other factors (such as music, friends,…) have a great influence on children.” Discuss both views and give your opinions.
In contemporary society, having lots of factors that impact the development of children. Some people think that families are a place, where has the greatest influence on children, but others believe that having many other reasons such as music or friends which have a great influence on children. In my opinion, both of family and music or friends influence on children as a whole.
On the one hand, some people think that family has the greatest impact on the growing up of children because parents have a part of the responsibility to teach children and they have plenty of time to expose to their children. parents often spend their spare-time to guide their children on how to become a good person or teach them studying. For example, parents will teach children about politeness. This helps children formation the politeness personality. In contrast, if parents have the wrong way, they will teach the wrong way for their children. That not only have a bad influence on awareness of children but also influence the development of children. Moreover, children tend to imitate their parents when they meet some typical activities of their parent and this also influence on children.
On the other hand, others claim that having many other factors influence children alike music or friends. First of all, children spend spare-time to listen to music or play game computer because of music and games help them feel relax and have a good mood. In contrast, if children listen to a piece of sad music, their mood can feel not good. Moreover, if children cannot concentrate on their study, some young person will listen to music due to some kinds of music that help them concentrate on studying. Furthermore, other relationship such as friends which both impacts awareness on children and influence their personality.
To sum up, although some commentators think that family has the greatest impact on children, I believe that different factors also influence on children such as music or friends.
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Suggestion: Parents
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 13.1623246493 8% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04531722054 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63192803999 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404833836858 0.561755894193 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3915911471 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.375 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8125 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314884060064 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138053759425 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103477944092 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252976304758 0.151304729494 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0861994944611 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.58950901804 77% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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