Many people think that the best way to lose weight is sport. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Many people think that the best way to lose weight is sport. Do you agree or disagree?

Numerous obese people, as they are already on rise, trying to dispose of their extra weight by putting an effort to the sphere of health. It is thought by some that expanding the hours of PE lessons in the school atmosphere is the best method to tackle this issue. In my opinion, I completely agree that this idea should be maintaned as they totally facilitate them to descend the number of obese youngsters wholly society and remain the future without overweight adolescents while the schools should also be provided with the plethora of sports equipments.

Firstly, through increasing the hours that are alloting for physical education lessons a lot more people will be capable of being slim build or pulchritudinious. In other words, they donate themselves to do way more physically demanding exercises which lead them to keep fit and be able-bodied. As a consequence of this, they will manage to be as they hoped and this is not only beneficial for themselves but also to the people around them since they also try to deal with the problem by imitating them.

Another point to consider is that equipping the schools with the sufficient tools for training that they need can offer students as well as others to train freely without any kinds of panics that will hault them to reach their aim. Hence, schools should be well furnished with training tools surplus.

In conclusion, I reatirate the opinion that it would be the greatest way provided the sports equipments were sustained which are in need of and the PE hours were increased.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1297.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93155893536 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61851609188 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574144486692 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5846587126 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.111111111 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2222222222 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8888888889 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0857340666249 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366043911301 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0245349527522 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0512907667071 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300684242371 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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