Many teenagers today spend a large amount of money on consumer goods and entertainment without worrying about the cost even though they may earn a little or no money themselves.
Why do you think young people sometimes spend their money irresponsibly?
In today's modern world, a huge population part of millenials has the tendency to spend huge amount of money acquiring numerous and useless products regardless of the expenditure. There are several reasons for this phenomenon, the most important of which are the lack of communication within the family and the bad influence of social media.
Undeniably, the institution of family has been altered throughout the years. To elaborate, modern families lead a fast pacing lifestyle in which the parents work all-day earning money to support their families. Therefore, children spend a massive amount of time isolated and in order to fill the emotional void from their absence, they buy or are the recipients of unnecessary goods. The proof is the fact that teenagers get very expensive smartphones as gifts. Thus in a small age, they learn to spend money irresponsibly.
In addition to this situation, social media brainwash minors to consume more and more commodities. In the sensitive age of adolescence, juveniles wish to be accepted by those close to their age, so they follow blindly bad role models on social platforms. Unfortunately, the intention of influencers is to pursue people to buy as many goods as possible. In other words, they upload an abundance of pictures daily to advertise clothes, perfumes etc manipulating youngsters to purchase them. That is why teenagers spend money without considering the cost of these items, trying not to be parias.
To conclude, I believe that the modern family crisis and the negative effect of social media have lead the youngsters to overconsumerism. Undoubtedly, this is something that the future generation should consider to change.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29259259259 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97596452993 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614814814815 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3295445721 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.071428571 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232793966627 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715441202029 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795954170205 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117784707249 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758669436344 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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