Many young people believe that it is important to buy expensive, fashionable clothes for school or going out. Others believe that parents should take more control on how their children spend their money.
Whether or not it is crucial for adolescents to splurge on exorbitant garments has triggered a heated debate. While several youngsters hold a firm belief that it is necessary to own prohibitively expensive and hip clothes for school or going outsides, others reject this notion, believing that parents should keep watchful eyes on the way their offsprings spend money. In this essay, I shall examine the merits of both sides of the argument and state my own opinion.
Some adolescents are of the opinion that possessing expensive are of paramount important due to host of reasons. First and foremost, it is noteworthy that garments which are costly are much more high-quality and durable compared to ones low-priced so that they can be used for a long time without being wrinkled or torn. Therefore, juveniles tend to splurge on the high-end garment so that they do not have to often go to buy more clothes due to getting torn. Another feasible explanation is that they want to show off their friends and others their wealth. From youngsters perspective, the vast majority of them always want to be outstanding and eye-catching and they think hip and trendy clothes can flatter them as well as project their wealth.
On the other hand, I am on the side with those who might argue that adolescents must be under their parents' control when they want to buy something. Admittedly, at the young ages, several youngsters do not fully aware of the value of money so they can effortlessly splurge on exorbitant garments without taking the prices into consideration. Hence, it is vital for parents to instruct their offsprings the value of money as well as keep watchful eyes on how they make the purchase decision. Another justification worth mentioning here is that most youngsters are financially dependent on their parents to buy high-end clothes due to thethey do not have much money. However their parents have to finance lots of other things related to daily life such as food supply, monthly bills so sometime it is lavish to spend an enormous amount of money on luxurious garments. So that parents had better pay attention at the how their children spend money rather than pamper whatever they want.
All things considered, convincing as two viewpoints may appear at first, I am assured to say that parents need to teach their offsprings how to appreciate the value of money and also focus on the way they purchase their things is more logic-based according to the above assumptions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94285714286 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69857189073 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521428571429 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0731231082 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.4 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331594728708 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106327102787 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704805850934 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189072765491 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586462293603 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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