In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is convienced that nowadays, many people think that both of men and woman in a household have a same responsibility to earn money for their family. Personally, I am on the same page with that statement supported by some reasons.
As an explanatory paragraph, the main argument is a family could gain a balance of live when both of wife and husband could earn money together. It is because the good life in the home could be realized by a good coordination between wife and husband. For example, when the husband and wife have a responsibility to earn money, they could fulfill their daily needs easily because recently, the price of primer materials are increasing. It means, the convenient of household could attain from the good coordination of spouses so they must manage it properly to avoid some miscommunications.
Nevertheless, there are several drawbacks if the citizens are on the different boat with this matter. Firstly, a woman that wants to keep their career after marriage would feel unfair. It is caused by they gain the good career before married but must leave it and at the end, it could make a problem in a household such as the conflict in every single day. For the model, a career woman want to gain lots of achievements even after getting married so if her big dreams are not approved by her husband, she would be angry when meet him. As the result, sometimes, earning money together would avoid lots of problems in household. Secondly, the daily needs of households are hard for fulfilling it. Today, the price of rice are higher then before that it is a crucial reason for working together. As proof, it is a common knowledge that the price of daily needs especially in a big city are expensive so the married couple needs to gain more fee to fulfill it. Thus, this activity could reach a good condition in the household to prevent some problems as economical problems.
To sum up where my track, the activity for earning money both of husband and wife could bring lots of benefit for their family such as avoid conflicts and economical problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'higher than'?
Suggestion: higher than
...illing it. Today, the price of rice are higher then before that it is a crucial reason for ...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...it. Today, the price of rice are higher then before that it is a crucial reason for ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'common knowledge'.
Suggestion: common knowledge
...n for working together. As proof, it is a common knowledge that the price of daily needs especiall...
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Line 3, column 1052, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...e household to prevent some problems as economical problems. To sum up where my track, th...
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Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...heir family such as avoid conflicts and economical problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72727272727 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68115557048 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484848484848 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7701056711 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.25 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15673568617 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531071124711 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457857896674 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11307317845 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286102209243 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.