More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extend do you agree?

Even though modern medicine has increased the life expectancy in general, the overall quality of life has taken a plunge due to health problems caused by the modern lifestyle. While some recommend a complete go back to traditional medicine, may others including me recommend a combination of traditional and modern medicines to adequately address the situation because traditional medicines were designed at a time that did not take the modern lifestyle into account.

As technology advanced and demand for goods increased, machines started performing many of the common tasks that humans used to perform because machines are more efficient in performing mundane tasks. As a result, the daily physical activity of humans has significantly decreased; for example, motor cars have eliminated the need to walk or cycle. Furthermore, as population increased the demand for food and supplies has increased with it. To meet that new demand, companies are producing genetically modified crops that yield a higher output but can cause diseases such as cancer. Although traditional medicines are very effective in treating both common and complex health conditions, they are not designed to manage issues caused by the lack of physical activity or the consumption of unhealthy foods.

Modern medicine has been making tremendous progress in managing life style problems such as obesity and cancer. However, there are a lot of known and unknown side effects to them because they have not been in the market for long. Traditional medicines on the other hand are devoid of such side effects and can treat a lot of issues that people face today. In addition, since modern medicine has assumed prominence today, traditional medicine is ignored to a great extent and does not receive enough funding. Therefore, traditional medicine is not catching up in some of the areas where modern medicine is doing wonders.

In conclusion, modern lifestyle has created medical problems that were absent in the past when humans consumed more natural produce and exercised more. As a result, traditional medicine that was created without taking the modern lifestyle into account cannot solve all the medical problems of the day even though it offers effective cures to many illnesses. Modern medicine, on the other hand, received significant research attention in the last century and has made strides in curing many diseases caused by lifestyle. Therefore, I recommend a combination of both traditional and modern medicines to create a harmonious balance.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun known seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of knowns'.
Suggestion: a lot of knowns
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ditional medicine is not catching up in some of the areas where modern medicine is doing wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, on the other hand, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35588972431 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7727839987 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3158772158 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.5625 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9375 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5625 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282266909442 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928053384619 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608634014664 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173654379474 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585440178813 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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