In most countries, prison is an effective solution for the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that a prison sentence system can effectively deal with issues of crime. While I accept that this penalty can reduce rate of crime, I agree that education reform can bring more advantages to help mitigation of lawbreaking behaviours.
On the one hand, putting criminals in jail as a punishment can be recognised as an efficient deterrent. This is because individuals have a fear of being deprived of their freedom. In prison, criminals should be entirely under surveillance and refrain from contacting their friends and families. Green island, in particular, in Taiwan has the most restrict prison system and those who commit a crime are absolutely isolated from their communities. Due to this fact, numerous offenders who used to be in that jail keep their promises and declaim that they will not commit any illegal acts.
On the other hand, improving education systems can be more effective to alleviate the deterioration in development of criminal behaviours. It is evident that the offenders do not gain a good quality of education, negatively influencing their mental and cognitive development during their childhoods. Furthermore, these people are not driven to cultivate normative behaviours. Statistics show that there is high rate of crime in developing nations as the local people not receiving a better education view violence as a normal behaviour. Therefore, provided that the education is paid great attention by the authorities, few people will become criminals.
In conclusion, although sentencing people to prison can solve the criminal problems, I believe that education is a priority to successfully decrease the rate of crime.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in particular, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37786259542 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01486372796 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591603053435 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5425529343 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.384615385 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154936479544 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552250011826 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364023151106 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958550499757 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345066770751 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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